Comments for Classmates

For Jake Ray


"Hi! The line about the guitar was really interesting, and I liked that it illustrated one of your hobbies. My favorite line in your poem is: "I am shelves full of dusty hardback books." I really love thrift shopping and find old books in vintage shops, so I really relate to that line."


"Hi, Jake. This was really fun to read. The humor throughout was absurd in the best way. I really liked how sincerely the narrator was commenting and critiquing the bakery, which made it really funny. The vocabulary added so much color to the story. Describing each detail really added to the story as well. Great job!"

"This is a really great poem. My favorite lines were: "Her curled hair is the color of a Lincoln penny. Not copper, but the new ones, with zinc." It's such an interesting and specific way to describe the color of her hair. Nice job."

"This poem is really interesting. My favorite line is the opening line: 'The cosmic torrent'"

"the cracks of growing concrete" is such an interesting line.

For Lilly P

"Hi, Lilly! I agree with a lot of the thoughts your poem conveys. I love flowers, so I completely agree with the second piece of your If I were in Charge of the World poem."

"I really liked the image paired with your I am poem."



For Gavin

"Hi, Gavin. I agree with a lot of the things you wanted to cancel. Monday Mornings are awful."

"I loved the image I got from your haiku. When I'm in the zone playing a game, I really don't think about anything else, so I thought that was a really interesting and true thought."

"Blue is such an interesting color to describe. To some it's so calming, but it also reminds me of the cold, and ice."

"Your dog seemed so sweet. I loved the picture you included. The story was so wholesome."